reader your sight of success
- begins in the action
- presentation tense(i am,not am)
- short, sharp,sentences
key words:climbing,windy,holidays
Climbing up the tree it is windy as it can be. It felt like I was going to full down on to the ground. It was not that scary and I nearly got a splinter my hand so I climbed down. So I didn't get a splinter in my hand. I am lucky I didn't get one.
You were lucky you didn't get a splinter, Nikitah!
ReplyDeleteWell done using short, sharp sentences.
thank you mr moriarty
DeleteCool Nakitah!
ReplyDeleteYou were really lucky to not get a splinter.
In the start sentence it kind of sounds like a poem.
Well done:-)