Friday, 8 February 2013

Climbing the tree

WALT choose words that describe a moment for the
reader your sight of success

  • begins in the action
  • presentation tense(i am,not am)
  • short, sharp,sentences


key words:climbing,windy,holidays

Climbing up the tree it is windy as it can be. It felt like I was going to full down on to the ground. It was not that scary and I nearly got a splinter my hand so I climbed down.  So I didn't  get a  splinter in my hand. I am lucky I didn't get one.

3 comments:

  1. You were lucky you didn't get a splinter, Nikitah!

    Well done using short, sharp sentences.

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    1. thank you mr moriarty

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  2. Cool Nakitah!
    You were really lucky to not get a splinter.
    In the start sentence it kind of sounds like a poem.
    Well done:-)

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